Art by Ambs

September 05, 2010

Shine



Like the first ray of sunshine…
Like the first drop of rain so divine…
I came into this world as a daughter -to shine…!!

These verses were scribbled way back in Nov 24, 2009!
This sudden discovery lit my face literally! ;)

2 comments:

Neeraja said...

Well am not a person who follows poems much....
But I think u can make it more simple....
Seems u r so full of ideas that smetimes u r cnfusd which 2 convey. If u r mre specific it wil luk mre convincng... I may b wrong.. Dats what I felt. Bt to put sme thoughts into wrds s nt easy 4 many.. Hats off 4 ur attempts...

Moon said...

Neer...

I get your point dear...So far, my main attempt has been to form poems in a rhyming fashion...For which i at times mercilessly complicate the ideas so much... that there is always the risk that though it might "sound" fine, it might not be conveyed effectively!
You inspire me to start thinking differently from nowon!! :) Thank U for ur honest feedback and encouragement!! :)